Haiku Contest! ^^

[Bellona Littlebrush]

A pity we can't win Lady Starblade, but these are rather fun. And I really could not resist the pun. Apologies my friends, foes, and comrades.

A shaking cavern
Fault lies in morphology
Will they make it out?

[Suellyn]

a hole in your heart
can only be filled by Su
that's right it's Extreme.

;D

[Revel]

Your in-laws were great
So I hope I find your mate
Before my next plate

[Jarrtail]

Instinct overcomes
Hunger crushing most true thought
Cravings will not stop

[Cairn Destop]

Your in-laws were great
So I hope I find your mate
Before my next plate

Even if you were not a contestant, this would be disqualified because it is not haiku.  This rhymes.

[Damask the Minstrel]

"His fate poetic,
Temptation overrode senses.
Destiny, his balm"

Well, technically, neither is this, but I was going to be polite and not point it out. (And, according to wikipedia's article, I can't find a rule that states it can't rhyme -- virtually none on here use a "season word" or kigo, so none of them are haiku according to the definition.)

EDIT: A look through the Oxford Reference Online came up with a good dozen definition from sources like the OED to the Dictionary of Literary terms. Only two said, "unrhymed" in the definition. To me, that means rhyming is not necessary, but doesn't disqualify. However, take from it what you will. (Double-edit: however, nearly all include the "season word" qualifier -- the longer ones go on to say that modern haiku poets rebel against the conventions, both of syllable count -- some do 3-5-3 -- and of kigo.)

[Cairn Destop]

As I said earlier, technically, these are all senyru, or a 5-7-5 poem.  As you noted, there is no mention of nature, such as the seasons, so it isn't actually haiku.  And it misses the kiko, which is what makes this form of poetry such a difficult thing to master.

Methinks though, Tara is going with the least restrictive definition, which is a strict adherence to the count as senyru is suppose to generate an emotion.  So maybe there is also a relaxation on the other aspects.

All of these comments from me are based on the many comment threads regarding such "haiku" contests on the other site.  There rules rule - though I have seen members bend them into pretzels.

His fate po - et - ic, = 5
Temp - ta - tion o - ver - rode senses. = 7
Des - ti - ny, his balm = 5

No rhyme, but I do agree, it is not haiku, or senyru.

[Damask the Minstrel]

Err... not "sen-ses"?

(And the kiko is nigh-impossible in English. Most folks just use puctuation to denote a 'turn', becuase it's the closest we can get to that motion.)

[Cairn Destop]

EDIT: A look through the Oxford Reference Online came up with a good dozen definition from sources like the OED to the Dictionary of Literary terms. Only two said, "unrhymed" in the definition. To me, that means rhyming is not necessary, but doesn't disqualify. However, take from it what you will. (Double-edit: however, nearly all include the "season word" qualifier -- the longer ones go on to say that modern haiku poets rebel against the conventions, both of syllable count -- some do 3-5-3 -- and of kigo.)

Yeah, somebody suggested the 3-5-3 format and formed a contest using that format.  Sad to say, nobody entered.  

And I do believe that word was the sticky wicket.  Nobody seemed to agree with the definition of that term and those using other sites that were point blank about rhymes said none allowed.  Think most of the poems fell into the 5-7-5 format on our site, though the winners did use the nature theme.  Not sure many hit the kiko idea.

Not per Dictionary.com

[Damask the Minstrel]

Well, I see that 'sense' is one syllable and I agree (though mighty long it is). Senses, however, seems pretty evenly split.

And there, almost all the way down: "tr.v.   sensed, sens?ing, sens?es" (EDIT: 'Wits' would work, then. Pre-16th century, 'wits' was used instead of 'senses'.)

Yus. I just... rhyming in haikus seems odd. I wouldn't disallow it, but you have so little to work with. Adding rhyme just seems to hinder the poem instead of elevate it, like it does in other styles.

[Erethas]

The breaking friendship
Tension and hardship become
A permanent rift.

[Opal]

Just to clarify: I am really not going to be picky here. It can rhyme if you want it to rhyme. All I want is for it to be RV5 related and stick to the 5-7-5 meter.

[Sycamore]

I have a haiku!
It is about Redventure.
It is not that good.

[Jarrtail]

Dark maze of twisting,
painted stone. Eyeless ones are
not missing very much.

[Rath the Whirlwind]

I like to chop things
I can do other stuff, though
I enjoy palm trees.